Tuesday, 24 July 2012

Nicola's Fan Fiction draft.

Add dates** Work on  paragraphing etc

Dear Fairy Diary,

Today was agonising. I had to watch my beloved Cinderella's heart break as her sisters talked incesintly of the Prince's upcoming ball. Lady Tremaine's Fairy  God mother,  Agatha, just floated around all day long too, not lifting a finger to help Lady Tremaine. She only ever whispers insults about Cinderella to ensure Ella's absence at the ball.

I have built a secret room under Ella's bed so I can take in her mothers wedding dress, just incase Ella finds a way to attend the ball. I am being extremely secretive because if Agatha even smells a whiff of my plans to send Ella to the ball - all fairy world will break lose.

I feel exasperated, I can only revel myself to Cinderella once in her life and I'm worried that time is coming. Attending this ball will change her whole life, just one glance shared by her and the prince will trigger their happy ever after, but what if Agatha stops Cinderella before she gets to the ball?

If only Cinderella knew that her and the prince are destined to be together, her father always said so, too. But after his passing she forgot her dreams and can only think about her daily torture - it's all part of Lady Tremaines spell. Agatha has been doing everything possible to keep Cinderella outside of the princes thoughts, even sending him anonymous picts of cinderellas two-step sisters, although the pictures have had a lot of photoshop done to them, and rightly so.

Dear Fairy Diary,

I can't  spread my wings to fall asleep, so Im flying around researching fairy god mother spells and I just read the perfect one. If all goes right, I will show Cinderella her mothers wedding dress in a dream tonight, she will find it tomorrow and start to day dream about the ball. At which point I will block her thoughts from Agatha. I will ensure her tardiness to the ball, and then her sisters wont's see her, as they'll definitely be eating all they can by that time.

If all goes wrong, I will have no choice but to show myself and take cinderella there myself, this shan't happen, my wings cannot perceive what could go wrong. I love my cinderella, she is so kind and sweet and she will finally be happy... Only three days till the ball. Only three days till true love prevails.

Dear Fairy Diary,

It worked! Cinderella has found her mothers wedding dress, it fits perfectly. Agatha has no idea what is coming, she will most certainly only be worried about putting a spell on Lady Tremaine and her daughters so they appear beautiful tomorrow night. Although all our power spells only last 4 hours, so I need to be weary that the ladies will be leaving promptly after the ball. There is only 1 day left now, and not too much to do aside from the usual assisting Ella with her chores. Tomorrow is Dee day! Time to sprinkle fairy dust over this beautiful girl and let her rest.

FAIRY DIARY!

Today...

Cinderella and I returned from picking berries to find her mother's  wedding dress ripped up and sitting in an ugly pile on the floor. My wings went into a spin as I could smell the fairy dust that lingered in the room, although Ella thought it was her sisters, I knew who it really was, AGATHA.

This left no time, with only 7 hours till the ball Cinderella was devastated, she sat on the ground weeping. The last thing she had of her mothers was gone. I could easily put it back together but not without showing myself. The risk was far too high.

I fluttered to the Princes Palace and saw his father was pressuring him to make an announcement; he would  chose a wife tonight, or forfeit the crown. No doubt that was Agatha's evil doing, placing thoughts into the Kings mind.

I returned home and couldn't help but cry when I again saw Cinderella's devastation. We sat on her floor crying just long enough for Agatha to see and do her dramatic hyena laugh.

The next 3 hours were torture. The smell of fairy dust and Ella's tears, the two worst smells in the world surrounded me. I made time stand for a while so I could think about the pros and cons of showing myself to Cinderella, I couldn't make up my mind until I heard Ella whisper "No one cares for me, I mays well run away, never to return." That was too much! It took all my strength to change forms, but there I was no longer invisible, no longer fluttering, but standing in front of my love Cinderella.

She gasped, I giggled.
"No time to waste" I said. She gasped again.
"Who are you? " Ella asked.
I let these words float out "I'm your fairy God Mother. I am here to get you to the ball."

Ella smiled as wide as I'd ever seen. "I've never been so lucky."

I flew us outside and there we stood as I fixed the dress and placed her in it. The rest was easy, fairy spells 101, mice into horses, the dog into a footman, pumpkin into  carriage and of course, her tears into glass slippers.

"How can I thank you?" Ella tenderly asked.
"Be home by midnight and tell me how the prince is" I said with a wink.

"Of course" She trailed as the horse rode off.

And here I am, it's much past midnight and "Happy Ever After" has been started. And no one, not even Agatha can stop true Magic.








A Fairy God mothers story.

Beginning - God mother using her powers - training and watching Cinderella - training in how she can only help cinderella once

Middle - Cinderella starts crying and wants to go to the ball - the fairy god mother decides she will use her powers just this once

End - Cinderella gets in the carriage and rides off


Characters - God mother : looking out for her always, always seeing her cry and trying to make things better for her, always present but not able to communicate
Cinderella - always wanting someone to care for her, but not knowing how to get help




 mice into horses, Bruno the dog into a footman, Major the horse into a coachman, a pumpkin into thecarriage, and transforms her torn dress into a beautiful blue dress with glass slippers. Cinderella departs for the ball after the Fairy Godmother warns her that the spell will expire at the stroke of midnight.
















6 comments:

  1. Hi,

    I loved how you went with the Diary idea. Its simple but you get a lot of information out of it. I also like how its written from the FGM's perspective(Most people write it in Cinderella's POV). I always thought the fairy godmother was kind of unreliable but in your version theres a reason for why she does or doesn't do something. Anyways I love what you have so far, can't wait to read the final. :)

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    1. Hey,

      Thanks heaps. Yea I'm still not too sure about the diary idea but I'm glad you liked it. I just wonder if it's too cliche? I don't know. Haha - yea I thought she needed to be justified a bit.. thanks for your feedback.

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  2. Check your spacing in the first paragraph.
    I like the way you did this, telling the story through diary entries. I recommend taking a look at the novel "Go ask Alice" as it's done in the same way and could give you some ideas.
    You might want to move the pictures along side of the text rather than just lumping them at the bottom of the blog.

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    1. Hi,

      Thanks for your feedback, about the spacing as it's only the draft I was just focused on getting my ideas down -- same with the pictures at the end I was just trying to imagine what she would look like but will move it around for my final.

      Thanks so much for the "Go ask alice" suggestion, just looked at it.

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  3. Nice idea how you made it seem as if the fairy god mother was there with Cinderella her whole life. The idea of the dairy isn't bad either maybe you can add dates to those as well?

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    1. Hey,

      Thank you, yea I felt she needed to be there the whole time to add some depth. Yea I like the dates idea, that's great.

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