Nicola's five Fan Fiction links.

Fanfiction Link One - Modern day Cinderella.

This piece of FanFiction is a modern take of Cinderella. The revolves around Ellie a 9th grade girl who has a crush. Her mother passed away some years before and her father is soon to be remarried. There is an announcement of a school dance, in which she is asked to attend by her crush. There is some tension between her and her step-mother, but eventually her Granny helps her to get a dress and she attends the dance. The stories ends with her crush asking her to be his girlfriend.

I find this piece of fan fiction to be moderately engaging. The story worked because of the twist of a well known Fair Tail into modern day. The style was fairly colloquial, not very expressive but at least there was a strong plot.  The context of a high school  was a good idea to enhance the modern day feel, however I felt there were some random parts of the story that didn't add to the plot.

For example the part about the geeky kid, "Lizard" was a bit random. It may have created a better  piece of FanFic if there was a little more character development.

The story was coherent in the way that there was a logical progression of the plot, however, I felt that at the beginning of the piece there was a lot of elaboration and towards the end there was a slight feeling of being rushed.
   

Fanfiction Link Two - Snow White.

This piece of fanfiction is a compelling read and you definitely want to know what happens next. It is based from Snow White and the Huntsman, set in modern day with traces back to years ago. It is more of a narrative showing Snow White's internal struggles as she navigates her life. The climax is towards the end of the story with Snow White meeting "The man with deep blue eyes."  This does create audience expectation  and leaves the reader wanting to know what happens next.

The story is set in first person narrative, the style and genre is basically a narrative all from Snow White's POV with no dialogue. The characterization is alright with a strong build up of Snow white, however it seems a little lack luster about the other characters. The coherence of the story in my opinion is not very good. The story doesn't have a very coherent vibe with the ending hanging there awkwardly and there being no set beginning, middle and end as such.

Overall, not a bad sotry, it is an easy read with a decent narative which present an interesting spin of modern day Snow White and the hintsman.  Could eaily develop into another chapter. The main drawback in my opinion is that there many mistakes with the grammar which subtract from the piece. The author is changing between tenses constatnl speaking in past tense and then in presnt then back to past, this is a draw back as takes away from the coherence. Also, makes the piece feel a little sloopy. 

  


Fanfiction Link Three - Robot Cinderella.

This piece of Fanfiction is very interesting as it is a fresh take on cinderella. The concept is that robots have been made to be slaves in the houses, do the dishes, cook and clean. Then one of the "Cinderella Robots" starts to develop human characteristics, different emotions start to surface and eventually she falls in love. It is with the kiss of her true love where the robot changes into a human and lives happily ever after. 

The story is set slightly in the future, but it is not too futuristic that you can't imagine it. The genre of modern day fairy tale is definitely a common one, but I like this story the best. While it is a bit longer than usual, there is a strong coherence that means the plot develops naturally and easily. The reader takes the side of the robot, and wants her to become a "real girl". The characterization is effective with a good portrayal of the mean "step mother". The story has a nice twist with the whole "fairy God mother" character, and it was this story that made me want to write a story from the fairy god mothers POV. Interesting sentence lengths and word choices make for a compelling read.



Fanfiction Link Four - Leap into love.

This piece of Fanfiction "leap into love" is an offshoot from Bridget Jones Diary. The synopsis starts with this "Bridget is anxiously awaiting Mark's return from an extended business trip, and what better way to welcome him home than by leaping into his arms...and landing in a whole mess of trouble?"  Mark has been away and comes home to ultimately have Bridget ask him to marry her. The interesting thing about this story is that the adjectives used are completely amazing. The coherence of the story is so strong as there are so many glorious words thrown about describing all the mundane parts of the story. 

There is a strong build of audience expectation throghout the two chapters of this fanfic. This is the first piece of Fanfic I have read that changes the POV throughout the story. I found this to be very effective because you can really see how much Mark misses and yearns for Bridget, a fact you wouldn't have been able to see if the story was only shared from one POV. 

The characterization is strong, with both Mark and Bridget's characters being clearly and strongly developed from beginning to end. Also as this has been a movie you can picture the characters and even how they talk, which makes this story come alive.

The only down side of this piece of fanfic would possibly be the plot for me. The writing is really engaging and compelling which carries the story, but it would have been better to have more of a decision making dialogue from Bridgets POV it just seems a little bit the the proposal was random. But maybe that's just me. Anyway, great story, nice writing style, only thing that could be improved is more build up to the proposal in the plot.


Fanfiction Link Five - Twilight.

This piece of Fanfiction is based off the final book in the twilight saga. The story is told from Edwards point of view. Instead of the Bella living and surviving child birth, in this Fanfiction she dies and Edward is devastated. This is fundamentally Edwards narrative, his first thoughts and feelings after losing his wife. He is facing his family and he can read their thoughts, he explains his anger and hatred in the moments that follow. 

In a way this reminds me of a poem I studied - it seems to follow the stream of consciousness approach. Where all Edward can do is focus on his own thoughts, his own grief, his own emotions. This works in the story because there doesn't need to be much in the way of Character Development because I would say the majority of readers have either seen or read twilight. The coherence is interesting because while there may not seem to be the original plot, beginning , middle and end, there is a momentum in the story. The strong emotions of Edward just pop off the page.

The only down side to me is that there could have been some more interesting words used. While the flow was good I felt like the emotion could have been better expressed through a more vivid vocabulary.

-Nicola Thomas IWrite 2012