Wednesday, 25 July 2012

Kowhai's Draft Fan Fiction

Alice in Wonderland, my take. What if Alice isn't crazy? What if this "Wonderland" she speaks of is a real place that she can come and go from freely? What if the name Alice is more of a title? What if people are trying to make her forget the place of her birth? The fact that shes really not that human after all, but still people insist shes crazy so she keeps Cheshire's visits a secret while he keeps her informed. 

Main character - A new Alice set in the 21st century
Supporting Characters - Cheshire Cat, The Mat Hatter, Rabbit, Hare
Antagonist - The Red Queen, Jabberwoki, Dr Bumby, The Executioner  

“Alice, Alice, wake up Alice!” I startled awake to see a dark tattooed larger than a dog cat. He smiled wide revealing white blood stained teeth. His body was too lean and covered in black tribal looking tattoos. His fur was a dark blue and his tail flicked lazily. “It’s about time you woke up Alice” he said his yellow eyes staring intently.  “My name is not Alice” I told him sitting up. I looked around, everything was white. The walls, the floor, ceiling, door even my bed and the sheets that covered it. “Then what is your name?” the cat asked lazily, crossing his front paws. "I don't know".
  • Set in this time 
  • Wonderland as an alternate universe
  • Relate her to the Alice in the game
  • Time in the asylum - as a child
Cheshire cat used to tell me stories when I was a little girl, he told me all about wonderland. He said that when I was a little older I would have to fight to make it peaceful again. I wrote stories and drew pictures of wonderland and its people, the good and the bad. Teachers often told me that Cheshire wasn't real, that wonderland was all in my head, my father believed I was going insane, telling me that insanity was in my blood. That's the last time I saw my father. He looked ashamed of me as he took me to the asylum, as he drove away and left me in the hands of strangers.
  • First person 
  • Question parentage - Alyce (mother) and the hatter? 
  • Tweedledee and Tweedledum - Care takers in the asylum?
"I know of a way to get you out of here Alice" Cheshire suggested one evening. "And how is that?" I asked moving my rook. "I will go away" I knocked the table, spilling chess pieces everywhere. "Oh Ches you cant go!" "But I must Alice. But do not fear, I will come back when you are no longer imprisoned, and I will take you away from here. I will take you to Wonderland" his grin was as wide as it ever was, his blood stained teeth and yellow eyes smiling. Tears fell from my eyes as I hurled my self at my best friend. "It's a promise Cheshire cat" I whispered into his fur as he faded away into nothing.
  • Some sort of disaster - Morbid, insanity inducing?
They held me back, I screamed and screamed. "Mother!" I called over and over. "Michael!" My voice was hoarse as I watched the men try to put out the fire. I turned to stare at the man who had done this. "Murderer!" I hissed. "Sedate her please! Shes only a child!" my so called father pleaded with the paramedics. I tired to resist, but they were too strong against my five year old self. The paramedics placed me in his arms as I was being pulled into oblivion. "All those stories aren't going to save you now" he spat vehemently. "Lets see if you can get to Wonderland from a padded cell!"
  • Released back to her home after 16 years? 
  • Incarcerated as a kid after watching her family's murder? Made to believe her family died in a simple car accident, step father after the money - or has no part?


8 comments:

  1. interesting take on Alice in wonderland, very dark, sinister, a more cruel and bloodthirsty storyline. The last paragraph feels as though some words are wrong, such as "Michel!" I am not sure if the spelling of Michel is meant to be Michael or Michelle, or an original spelling.

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    1. No, you are right. I got my spelling wrong. Thanks for pointing that out. It's supposed to be Michael.

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  3. Wow, this sounds really interesting. Alice in Wonderland has also been one of my favourites when I was a kid (: would love to read a darker version of this! I think it might be interesting to see the Incarcerated as a kid but good job so far and keep it up!

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    1. Thanks. I can say for sure that there is definitely going to be "asylum time". Its just finding a reason to put her there that has me stumped. But I have the basics down thanks to Wilson's case book http://alice.wikia.com/wiki/Wilson%27s_Casebook. Its a doctors journal of what she went through.

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  5. The style & genre is definitely more dark -- it's a good twist. Only thing would be I dont know how coherent it is.. It doesn't quite flow to me just yet, but that's probably because youhaven't finished just yet.

    Only other thing I was thinking about the father.. do u mean "sedate her please?" instead of seduce her? or am I confused.

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  6. Well that's embarrassing. It is supposed to be sedate. Maybe i was too into writing. Thanks for pointing that out. I hope it'll flow more as i write it up, check out my final when you have the time and tell me? Thanks

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